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Asphalt Zonferno

Post by Ichi Kuros on Thu Sep 03, 2015 7:19 pm

Name:Asphalt Zonferno
Race:Shinigami and human hybrid
Rank:Lieutenant of squad 2
Squad:Squad 2
Age: 18 (human years)(born to a shinigami and a human so he ages in human years)

Description: He has long golden spikey hair and he's 5'8. His eyes are sparkling light green. He's a creamy caramel or probably a little lighter in complexion. He wears a black jacket with golden outline and a dragon crest on it. He wears a custom made shinigami kimono under the jacket.

Zanpakuto: Zekken, command: Unleash your power, Zekken. Description: A black short one handed sword appears in his right hand. His power skyrockets and he becomes a little faster. (sword is steel replica, it belongs to Yuuki from Sao [Zekken])

Bankai: Zekken Excalibur. Description: The black sword becomes longer and turns to gold. It splits into two and his speed and agility increases drastically. His normal wear turns into a royal golden armor. (Armor looks like Gilgamesh's armor)

Background (optional): Born to the king of dragons, Asphalt grew up in a royal background. His parents trained him from very young (age 4) to master skills. He's become strong but he focuses on speed and agility. He gained his Shikai at the age of 10 and his bankai at 15. He cannot maintain his bankai for very long, if he tries to go over the limit he blacks out. Due to his inability to maintain his bankai, he rarely uses it and his mother is the only one who ever saw it. He's very kind and he never gives up. He rather help everyone than only the rich. He has great leadership skills and he is outspoken. He is enthusiastic and always positive. As a royal figure, he's been given special treatment from his peers and he doesn't have many friends. Some people acknowledges him as the Prince he is, while others scorn at him in jealousy.

His mother had to become a substitute shinigami for the sake of saving her little sister(his aunt). She successfully saved her and went to the soul society and would only be accepted into their ranks under special circumstances. She was sent to the academy where she learned Kido and how to master a zanpakuto. On a mission to exorcise hollows she met a young man(his dad)who turned out to be a powerful Prince. He helped her and they became friends. Over time they drawn extremely close to each other and started a relationship. After a while they got married and later she gave birth to Asphalt. Her name was Misaka Torismo which she now goes by the name Misaka Zonferno. She has a Shikai and a bankai. She trained her son so he can grow up and be a great leader. She trained him until he was able to achieve his bankai.

His dad was born a prince and was the first of two boys. He and his younger brother trained very hard in special ancient techniques and traditions as they would be the leaders of the family. As the heir to the throne, he was heavily watched and guarded for his protection but he disliked this. When he was older he unlocked his Shikai, a golden Trident by the name Triton. As he trained with his brother to master his Shikai he unlocked bankai. Soon after unlocking bankai he went on a mission where he met a beautiful young lady by the name Misaka Torismo. After saving her life, they became close friends and later got married. He became King of the Dragons after four months of his wedding due to his father's retirement. After a while he found out that his wife was pregnant. They got a son and he trained their offspring in many Royal ways just as he, himself, was taught. His name is Alfred Zonferno, King of the Dragons. Due to his kingly work, he was unable to train his son for a short period of time and in that period of time, his son got a bankai. He doesn't know about the bankai as it is being kept a secret from everyone except for Asphalt and Misaka.

Dragons.
Being a dragon doesn't mean being a mythical creature that breathes fire. Dragons are a class of legendary warriors (shinigami) that are either members of or apart of the Royal Zonferno family. The members being direct family and the others being people who serve the family in battle as their army.


Last edited by Ichi Kuros on Fri Sep 04, 2015 1:49 pm; edited 10 times in total (Reason for editing : Expanding)
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Re: Asphalt Zonferno

Post by straywolf174 on Fri Sep 04, 2015 1:09 am

Alright so i adore your choice of words and praise the thought behind Him, but there is a bit of a problem. Nothing major though. Once you add the Bio chart's "Name, race, etc." bars before putting in the actual information, that would be great.
Try taking a look at some of the approved bio's for a hint on how it's done.

Also, i love that you made him a Hybrid race, though because he is half human, it would be fair to put something along the lines of " Hybrid (Shinigami x Human) " where the race is, just so people can have an easier, quick veiw on what they would be dealing with.

There is one more thing though before you jump in.

His bankai.

It is said that his parents trained him.
Was his mother super human, or did he have a Shinigami step mother, his real mother being none the wiser? Was his father secretley dating another captain, inducing an unknown love affair, giving him the training from higher classes...? And what of this royal backround...is he recognised as such by other comrades?

I often take pride in characters with a past, but those who choose to give them one must take into consideration on how much need be known.

Poor Asphalt is but a third seat, and aside from important cases like Renji (a luitennant,) or Ikkaku, it is unheard of for such a low class squad member to have bankai. So either flesh out his past, or keep the idea for a more futuristic plot.
Say, he gains bankai while searching for the power to save his real mother from the evil step mother who trained him?! Hahaha, forget that part, i'm just teasing.

Point being, please edit and afterward, it shall be approved, thank you for your patience.
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Re: Asphalt Zonferno

Post by Ichi Kuros on Fri Sep 04, 2015 1:41 am

If I remember correctly Ikkaku was third seat and have bankai. Is it possible that I can become a lieutenant, I actually planned Asphalt to be captain but before that lets start low
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Re: Asphalt Zonferno

Post by straywolf174 on Fri Sep 04, 2015 11:48 am

Special cases for tite kubo plots, yes.
This can be possible in theory but there must be a good reasoning behind it, or else it becomes dull and uninteresting - not to mention on terms of borderline god modding.

I like how the past looks longer, and the training parts are appreciated. However, making a young shinigami captain...i would like to point out that even a third seat with bankai is rare.

In the Canon, it was something people would keep secret because of the unwanted responsibility (because of their young age or churlish goals,) so i suppose it depends on yourself and how much you want to do as far as character development across the way.

Take for instance, Sara Shinamori. Part of my reason for making her abandon the Hollow in the earlier plots was because even she couldn't take the stress of leading an army AND ballancing her own desires (Wanting to be human, wanting to be with Lyonin, Wanting to protect the Shinamori Clan Incarnations, etc.).

It was stressful when she was 800 years old! Far more expeirienced...you see, I'm not bragging, but roleplay isn't just writing words. You create a life, albeit a fantasy one. Realism and human psychology comes into play alot.

I want to say the bio looks alot better, and i'm willing to approve it simply because it meets the general requirements. However if you wish to take on more, then i highly suggest re-thinking your aproach on Asphalt Zonferno. For the sake of your own expeirience of course.

Let me know, so i may approve or put on hold if necessary.

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Re: Asphalt Zonferno

Post by Ichi Kuros on Fri Sep 04, 2015 1:54 pm

Will this update do?
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Re: Asphalt Zonferno

Post by straywolf174 on Fri Sep 04, 2015 2:25 pm

You certainly worked hard on it, so, why the hell not?

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Re: Asphalt Zonferno

Post by Setoku on Fri Sep 04, 2015 2:47 pm

Gotta agree with you for once Stray. Love the background you got going ichi.
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Re: Asphalt Zonferno

Post by Ichi Kuros on Fri Sep 04, 2015 2:55 pm

Thank you
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Re: Asphalt Zonferno

Post by straywolf174 on Fri Sep 04, 2015 3:08 pm

I know right. Too bad Kisagi got to him before your dreaded charries did, huh flea? -Chuckles-
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Re: Asphalt Zonferno

Post by Setoku on Fri Sep 04, 2015 7:14 pm

The only one who would get his claws in him would be Erik... And he hasn't been introduced officially yet.... So the kid is safe... For now <.< Think Kisagi is odd? >.>
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Re: Asphalt Zonferno

Post by straywolf174 on Fri Sep 04, 2015 8:17 pm

Oh my little Ryuji-Sama is VERY odd. No doubt. But...who's to say his toungue isn't as silver as Setoku's?
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Re: Asphalt Zonferno

Post by Setoku on Fri Sep 04, 2015 8:19 pm

Tch, you prolly based him off Setoku - Two weirdos, cut from the same silk cloth of elegance.... Yet not beauty... odd <.<
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Re: Asphalt Zonferno

Post by straywolf174 on Fri Sep 04, 2015 8:31 pm

Bish please, i actually molded him off of three seperate characters originally made to be Stray's Fraccion back when she was Sexa Espada.
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